tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1612222355939653984.post8181816725303028121..comments2022-01-24T00:29:16.067-08:00Comments on Olympic investigation: Interview with Sponsored Boxer Joe 'Marvelous' McAllisterOlympic Sponsorshiphttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08869894229603739589noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1612222355939653984.post-81125635481102422172012-04-22T23:55:08.856-07:002012-04-22T23:55:08.856-07:00Credit for obtaining the interview, and there'...Credit for obtaining the interview, and there's some good stuff in there. However, you need to restructure it so that the juicy stuff is flagged up in your intro - otherwise people don't know it's there. The following quote stands out for me: <br /><br />"having a sponsor sends out a message out that you’re a worthy boxer, it also sends out a big message to your opponent and having that little psychological edge is exactly what your looking for before a fight"<br /><br />- or "There are people in this club that have sold their bikes to buy gloves and pay for their membership because their parents cant afford it"<br /><br />One of these should be what you lead on, not simply 'We interviewed someone'. <br /><br />Also: watch for typos like "be coming" (first par - should be "becoming") and "Joe was instantaneous" (a person cannot be instantaneous unless they go from not existing to existing - it is their reaction that is instantaneous)<br /><br />Finally, any quote longer than one line should be separated from your intro and indented (use the blockquote option in your formatting) - and all quotes should begin with a capital letter, e.g. <br /><br />Joe explains that the sport of boxing is often given bad publicity: <br /><br />"Boxing’s always been a sport which is stereotyped..."Paulbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17045515139245301369noreply@blogger.com